Hmmâ¦.Still sounds a little weak. Although the writer is now void from the statement, there is still doubt in this claim. This is where diction becomes important. The key is to use words that make the claim stronger and more assertive. Taking out the passive voice in the statement will add strength to the statement.
Constructing a working thesis should come after brainstorming or deriving a topic. It should be a thesis that can help guide you as a writer through the composition of the essay. A simple way to begin the construction of a working thesis is to write "I believe that ... " and follow it up with a simple claim that includes the key topics to be discussed in the essay. An example would be:
19/07/2015 · Weak Thesis Statements Kaitlin Krebs
Rather, his musical evolution is usedto illustrate the harm done by the interference in the arts by Soviet politicalauthorities and thereby carry out the seemingly obligatory attack on the lack of artisticfreedom there.The purpose of this paper is to investigate the facts behind this argument anddetermine whether or not he is a valid example of this phenomenon.